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3rd October, 2006 at 02:25:19 -
Hey, I'm actually doing some gmae stuff, and I wrote this intro cinematic thing because I was bored. Tell me how shit it is (rate it), and tell me what to do to improve it. Kay.
Game starts
-Cinema-
*Games starts off with the camera following 4 characters walking down a dimly lit castle hallway. One of the 4 has a lusciously delicious hairstyle (Balfazar), holding a bow; another has a sleek cape, and a long sword, and spiked hair (Lance); another with a ridiculously large axe and large muscles (Aaron); and tailing the group is a boy with a pushup bra, for whatever reasons, wielding knives (Adam). They are moving swiftly though the castle hallway*
*game credits scroll along the top part of the screen as the 4 run*
Aaron: You know guys, we've been running along this hallway for at least ten minutes.
Lance: Shut up Aaron, you're just lazy and fat. Stop complaining.
Aaron: No seriously, no castle should have a mile long hallway.
Balfazar: Maybe we're on one of those fancy treadmills! *stops moving*
*the camera continues to follow the other 3 as they continue running, as balfazar is swiftly moved off the side of the screen. After some questioning glances, the other 3 stop running as well, and the camera follows them as they move along. Eventually, the floor stops moving, to show Balfazar taken hostage by 4 guards*
Adam: Well, hello Mr. Balfazar. How are you today?
Lance: This solves some questions, and raises a few...
Guard 1: Huh, I guess the treadmill idea really did work, are you guys idiots?
Balfazar: Well, in our defense, it was dark.
Guard 2: Why are you guys running through our castle anyways?
Balfazar: Well, we're a small mercenary group...
Guard 4: Worst mercenaries ever
Aaron: I agree
Adam: Wait wait, we can still blow up the castle and finish the mission, don’t be stupid.
Guard 1: ...
-cinema battle-
-end battle-
Aaron: Fun, lets do that again sometime.
*group walks along more, balfazar in the rear*
*the group keeps walking for a few minutes, before lance stops and turns around*
Lance: Balfazar... what are you doing?
Balfazar: Oh...
*the camera scrolls back a few screens to find post-it notes littering the ground, then quickly scrolls back to the group*
Lance: Why...
Balfazar: I thought they looked cool.
Aaron: May I reiterate, worst mercenaries ever
*group walks on*
Balfazar: ... I like post-it notes though…
*Finally, the 4 reach the exit of the castle, and leave*
Lance: Okay, we're in the clear, flip the switch aaron.
*aaron pulls out a remote control, and flips the switch*
*nothing*
Balfazar: Dammit, are you serious? Did you not plant the bomb?
Adam: Oh... this?
*holds out plastic tube*
Lance: Good gracious child, how hard was it to drop the bomb somewhere in that huge hallway?
Adam: Well, we could always go in again.
Lance: Screw that, we're leaving.
Aaron: Worst mercenaries ever.
Lance: Shut up.
*The top half on the screen turns black, and the characters start walking away slowly. The sun is just rising, and I plan to have the characters look like shadows against the sun*
*on the top half of the screen, a story scrolls*
“The four 'mercenaries' trudge back home unsuccessful. Part of an elite combat training school, they are regularly expected to carry out assignments for exams, most of which the four fail. Despite failing the missions, they have a reputation for being able to do even the toughest of jobs"
*the screen goes back to normal, the colors revert back, and they continue to walk, before the screen shakes and rocks and debris(think that's the right word) fly behind them in an explosion*
*characters stop*
Adam: Nice guys, we did it...
Lance: I'm not even gonna question that.
Adam: *pulls out plastic tube and examines* Oh, sorry guys, this is just my toothpaste container.
Balfazar: Why... do you carry around a foot long thing of toothpaste?
Adam: Gotta keep those teeth white for the ladies... or maybe even some manly men...
Balfazar: *whines* Lance... Adam's hitting on me!
Aaron: Guys, we are, BY FAR, the best mercenaries ever.
Lance: *sigh*
*the characters walk on, and the screen fades*
*The scene fades back into the four walking into the classroom. There's a teacher standing at the far end of the room*
Teacher: *sigh* Oh, you're back. How'd it go?
Balfazar: Meh, there was this confusing as hell hallway which actually turned out to be a treadmill, which surprised us all, because it looked like we weren't very stealthy at all...
Lance: Shut up, it went fine.
Teacher: ...What? Mission Complete? *looks stunned* That's a surprise, did you blow it up by accident?
Balfazar: Yes sir.
Aaron: *shrugs* At least he's honest.
Lance: You've lost speaking priveledges for a week young man.
Balfazar: Huh? Wh...
Lance: No.
Teacher: Whatever works, I guess. You're all done for the day.
Adam: Well, see you kids later, I'm gonna go hang out with my friends.
Aaron: Haha, you don't have any friends.
Adam: *thinks* ... well, then I'm gonna hang out with you cool cats for a bit.
Aaron: ...Please... just... no.
Lance: No, I'm going to bed.
Balfazar: That's boring.
Aaron: I think I will too.
Balfazar: I guess I'll hang out with you then Adam.
Adam: Okay, cool man.
*The group splits off into two different directions, Aaron with Lance, Balfazar with Adam. Balfazar and Adam walk for a bit*
Balfazar: So, where are we going?
Adam: To hang out with my friends.
Balfazar: I thought we went over this.
Adam: Smoke some...
Balfazar: OOH. THOSE FRIENDS. *pauses*... Okay then, cya.
*Adam walks away from Balfazar as he stands there*
-END CINEMATIC-
"Isn't it always amazing how we characterize a person's intelligence by how closely their thinking matches ours?"
~Belgarath
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