Sketchys edit looks nice but I'd work on the light shaft because your edit destroyed it imho. I like the sharpness of J's original but his remake looks like if it was animated correctly, it would be beautiful.
That's it after increasing the contrast, improving the pillars, and then I added a slight gradient to the whole thing.
I think all I want to fix at this point is the background.
If anyone wishes to suggest any final touches I'd be more than happy to hear them!